Comparing Samples

Health and Physical Education

Years 7 and 8

Satisfactory

Written response: Bushwalking

1 Annotation 1
Identifies two benefits of being in the outdoors, including connection to the natural environment 2 Annotation 2
Describes practical strategies they used to prepare for their bushwalk to protect their safety and health 3 Annotation 3
Describes how the nutritional value of the food they took was appropriate for the energy demands of the walk 4 Annotation 4
Identifies two strategies for protecting the environment so that others may enjoy it in the future 5 Annotation 5
Reflects on additional preparation they could undertake next time to enhance their experience of connecting with the natural environment 6 Annotation 6
Includes an intention to connect with the environment

  • Annotations

  • 1
    Annotation 1
    Identifies two benefits of being in the outdoors, including connection to the natural environment
  • 2
    Annotation 2
    Describes practical strategies they used to prepare for their bushwalk to protect their safety and health
  • 3
    Annotation 3
    Describes how the nutritional value of the food they took was appropriate for the energy demands of the walk
  • 4
    Annotation 4
    Identifies two strategies for protecting the environment so that others may enjoy it in the future
  • 5
    Annotation 5
    Reflects on additional preparation they could undertake next time to enhance their experience of connecting with the natural environment
  • 6
    Annotation 6
    Includes an intention to connect with the environment
1 Annotation 1
Identifies a strategy to ensure their buddy takes the appropriate clothing with them and details what this might be 2 Annotation 2
Identifies the importance of taking the right foods on a bushwalk and gives an appropriate example 3 Annotation 3
Identifies appropriate actions to take to care for the environment 4 Annotation 4
Suggests how they can ensure that their buddy stays safe while on the bushwalk 5 Annotation 5
Promotes wellbeing by involving their buddy in deciding on safety rules

  • Annotations

  • 1
    Annotation 1
    Identifies a strategy to ensure their buddy takes the appropriate clothing with them and details what this might be
  • 2
    Annotation 2
    Identifies the importance of taking the right foods on a bushwalk and gives an appropriate example
  • 3
    Annotation 3
    Identifies appropriate actions to take to care for the environment
  • 4
    Annotation 4
    Suggests how they can ensure that their buddy stays safe while on the bushwalk
  • 5
    Annotation 5
    Promotes wellbeing by involving their buddy in deciding on safety rules
1 Annotation 1
Identifies that food preferences can contribute to their buddy's enjoyment of the walk 2 Annotation 2
Considers the enjoyment and involvement of others 3 Annotation 3
Plans for the safety of themselves and others

  • Annotations

  • 1
    Annotation 1
    Identifies that food preferences can contribute to their buddy's enjoyment of the walk
  • 2
    Annotation 2
    Considers the enjoyment and involvement of others
  • 3
    Annotation 3
    Plans for the safety of themselves and others

Above satisfactory

Written response: Bushwalking

Annotations overview

In this work sample the student demonstrates an understanding of how connecting with the environment can promote wellbeing of self, others and the community. The student also shows appreciation for the importance of protecting the natural environment

1 Annotation 1
Identifies two benefits of being active in an outdoor setting: physical benefits and connection to the natural environment 2 Annotation 2
Describes three actions they took in preparation for the bushwalk to promote their own and others' health, safety and wellbeing 3 Annotation 3
Provides justification for their choice of food based on nutritional value and impact on the natural environment 4 Annotation 4
Explains the actions they took to ensure they had minimal impact on the natural environment 5 Annotation 5
Reflects on additional preparation they could take next time to enhance their experience of connecting with the natural environment, including the flora and fauna

  • Annotations

  • 1
    Annotation 1
    Identifies two benefits of being active in an outdoor setting: physical benefits and connection to the natural environment
  • 2
    Annotation 2
    Describes three actions they took in preparation for the bushwalk to promote their own and others' health, safety and wellbeing
  • 3
    Annotation 3
    Provides justification for their choice of food based on nutritional value and impact on the natural environment
  • 4
    Annotation 4
    Explains the actions they took to ensure they had minimal impact on the natural environment
  • 5
    Annotation 5
    Reflects on additional preparation they could take next time to enhance their experience of connecting with the natural environment, including the flora and fauna
1 Annotation 1
Explains strategies to ensure that their buddy has the appropriate clothing for the walk 2 Annotation 2
Identifies comprehensive requirements to promote the health and safety of their buddy during the walk 3 Annotation 3
Describes the characteristics and types of food appropriate for a bushwalk, giving specific examples 4 Annotation 4
Demonstrates understanding of the importance of theirself and others taking action to protect the natural environment 5 Annotation 5
Identifies that following rules is an important element of staying safe, and involves their buddy in deciding what these rules might be

  • Annotations

  • 1
    Annotation 1
    Explains strategies to ensure that their buddy has the appropriate clothing for the walk
  • 2
    Annotation 2
    Identifies comprehensive requirements to promote the health and safety of their buddy during the walk
  • 3
    Annotation 3
    Describes the characteristics and types of food appropriate for a bushwalk, giving specific examples
  • 4
    Annotation 4
    Demonstrates understanding of the importance of theirself and others taking action to protect the natural environment
  • 5
    Annotation 5
    Identifies that following rules is an important element of staying safe, and involves their buddy in deciding what these rules might be
1 Annotation 1
Promotes the wellbeing of their buddy by inviting them to consider factors that will contribute to their enjoyment of the walk 2 Annotation 2
Plans strategies for ensuring the enjoyment of others 3 Annotation 3
Considers the safety of self and others by preparing a detailed list of essential equipment needed for the bushwalk

  • Annotations

  • 1
    Annotation 1
    Promotes the wellbeing of their buddy by inviting them to consider factors that will contribute to their enjoyment of the walk
  • 2
    Annotation 2
    Plans strategies for ensuring the enjoyment of others
  • 3
    Annotation 3
    Considers the safety of self and others by preparing a detailed list of essential equipment needed for the bushwalk

Below satisfactory

Written response: Bushwalking

1 Annotation 1
Identifies the opportunity for exercise as a benefit of being outside 2 Annotation 2
Identifies two resources they needed to prepare for the walk 3 Annotation 3
Provides a basic reason for why their food choice was appropriate 4 Annotation 4
Identifies one way of looking after the environment 5 Annotation 5
Provides one suggestion for change before the next bushwalk

  • Annotations

  • 1
    Annotation 1
    Identifies the opportunity for exercise as a benefit of being outside
  • 2
    Annotation 2
    Identifies two resources they needed to prepare for the walk
  • 3
    Annotation 3
    Provides a basic reason for why their food choice was appropriate
  • 4
    Annotation 4
    Identifies one way of looking after the environment
  • 5
    Annotation 5
    Provides one suggestion for change before the next bushwalk
1 Annotation 1
Provides ideas to prepare their buddy for the bushwalk 2 Annotation 2
Uses personal preference as the criteria for deciding what food to take 3 Annotation 3
Identifies one action to help others care for the environment 4 Annotation 4
Recognises that school rules are important

  • Annotations

  • 1
    Annotation 1
    Provides ideas to prepare their buddy for the bushwalk
  • 2
    Annotation 2
    Uses personal preference as the criteria for deciding what food to take
  • 3
    Annotation 3
    Identifies one action to help others care for the environment
  • 4
    Annotation 4
    Recognises that school rules are important
1 Annotation 1
Identifies strategies that rely on others to take responsibility for safety and wellbeing 2 Annotation 2
Understands that having the right equipment is necessary and relies on others to decide what equipment is needed

  • Annotations

  • 1
    Annotation 1
    Identifies strategies that rely on others to take responsibility for safety and wellbeing
  • 2
    Annotation 2
    Understands that having the right equipment is necessary and relies on others to decide what equipment is needed

Satisfactory

Written response: Bushwalking

1 Annotation 1
Identifies two benefits of being in the outdoors, including connection to the natural environment 2 Annotation 2
Describes practical strategies they used to prepare for their bushwalk to protect their safety and health 3 Annotation 3
Describes how the nutritional value of the food they took was appropriate for the energy demands of the walk 4 Annotation 4
Identifies two strategies for protecting the environment so that others may enjoy it in the future 5 Annotation 5
Reflects on additional preparation they could undertake next time to enhance their experience of connecting with the natural environment 6 Annotation 6
Includes an intention to connect with the environment

  • Annotations

  • 1
    Annotation 1
    Identifies two benefits of being in the outdoors, including connection to the natural environment
  • 2
    Annotation 2
    Describes practical strategies they used to prepare for their bushwalk to protect their safety and health
  • 3
    Annotation 3
    Describes how the nutritional value of the food they took was appropriate for the energy demands of the walk
  • 4
    Annotation 4
    Identifies two strategies for protecting the environment so that others may enjoy it in the future
  • 5
    Annotation 5
    Reflects on additional preparation they could undertake next time to enhance their experience of connecting with the natural environment
  • 6
    Annotation 6
    Includes an intention to connect with the environment
1 Annotation 1
Identifies a strategy to ensure their buddy takes the appropriate clothing with them and details what this might be 2 Annotation 2
Identifies the importance of taking the right foods on a bushwalk and gives an appropriate example 3 Annotation 3
Identifies appropriate actions to take to care for the environment 4 Annotation 4
Suggests how they can ensure that their buddy stays safe while on the bushwalk 5 Annotation 5
Promotes wellbeing by involving their buddy in deciding on safety rules

  • Annotations

  • 1
    Annotation 1
    Identifies a strategy to ensure their buddy takes the appropriate clothing with them and details what this might be
  • 2
    Annotation 2
    Identifies the importance of taking the right foods on a bushwalk and gives an appropriate example
  • 3
    Annotation 3
    Identifies appropriate actions to take to care for the environment
  • 4
    Annotation 4
    Suggests how they can ensure that their buddy stays safe while on the bushwalk
  • 5
    Annotation 5
    Promotes wellbeing by involving their buddy in deciding on safety rules
1 Annotation 1
Identifies that food preferences can contribute to their buddy's enjoyment of the walk 2 Annotation 2
Considers the enjoyment and involvement of others 3 Annotation 3
Plans for the safety of themselves and others

  • Annotations

  • 1
    Annotation 1
    Identifies that food preferences can contribute to their buddy's enjoyment of the walk
  • 2
    Annotation 2
    Considers the enjoyment and involvement of others
  • 3
    Annotation 3
    Plans for the safety of themselves and others